I will enter into your thoughts and remind
I will surround your fantasies and confine
I will be there when you ignore
I will be the music of your score.
I remember even when you choose to forget
I await when you remain in regret
I am Near when you walk away
I embrace when you wonder astray.
I am All and Enough for eternity
Left my signature in all you discover to lead you to Me
My Light destroys the root of misery
Close My eyes and breathe easily.
How sweet is my Remembrance?
I surrounded and lifted your essence
Breathe reality choosing Me
Cherish this moment; infinity.
As I take you
Where you belong
Shower you with love;
Its been so long.
I missed you more
My Patience is Great
Each breath is a choice
Now choose your fate.
Zayneb Khan, 23rd April 2010.
I will surround your fantasies and confine
I will be there when you ignore
I will be the music of your score.
I remember even when you choose to forget
I await when you remain in regret
I am Near when you walk away
I embrace when you wonder astray.
I am All and Enough for eternity
Left my signature in all you discover to lead you to Me
My Light destroys the root of misery
Close My eyes and breathe easily.
How sweet is my Remembrance?
I surrounded and lifted your essence
Breathe reality choosing Me
Cherish this moment; infinity.
As I take you
Where you belong
Shower you with love;
Its been so long.
I missed you more
My Patience is Great
Each breath is a choice
Now choose your fate.
Zayneb Khan, 23rd April 2010.
Wow a good sounding poem, it's in first narrative telling the reader what the writer wants to say... Very moving! I would if u want to take the poem a level deeper add/weave in some lines that create images for the reader showing rather then telling for example, 'thinking of you is like the sweet magnolias of my garden' (Simile) is a way of saying, 'you smell sweet'... :) Just something i learned from my tutor at Uni' who is a poet and teaches poetry to us writers. I hope u like my feedback... :) Aniece Khan (Fbk) Xx
ReplyDeletePeace Aniece, thank you so much for your comment and sharing your learning. Its great to learn! I would love to learn more about your creative writing and please feel free to add links to any of your pieces. Thank you xx :)
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